This evening, I’m attempting to write a blitz poem for Wea’ve Written Weekly at the Skeptic’s Kaddish. Here is the week’s prompt poem from Murisopsis, and here is the prompt: Write a “blitz” poem that includes something about a mouse or mice.
Blitz poems are very repetitive in a way that I don’t find particularly euphonious, but I think if I get the tempo right, my attempt won’t be too tragic. Here we go!
Shadow eye view
Shadow over soil
Soil cast in grass
Soil burrows last
Last under the winter
Last in cozy comfort
Comfort in routine
Comfort from the house
House that hid the mouse
House that sat in sun
Sun that cast the shadow
Sun light that spread joy
Joy for a small mouse
Joy for a safe space
Space for hope’s growth
Space for new souls
Souls that sing songs
Souls will spin along
Along the dish rack
Along the mouse trap
Trap a fresh start
Trap a work of art
Art with shadow
Art with deep glow
Glow from the sunrise
Glow under moonlight
Moonlight pools bright
Moonlight spotting little feet
Feet that tread at midnight
Feet small as a pen tip
Tip of shadow’s pattern
Tip of toes in corridors
Corridors that hum with noise
Corridors that shine with life
Life sings on in repeat
Life thunders a drum beat
Beat from scars that linger
Beat but still a winner
Winner winter dance
Winner with a chance
Chance begets success
Chance creates the match
Match thrown by careless hands
Match stick in mouse’s path
Path across the kitchen
Path carved in slim shadow
Shadow slinking slowly
Shadow carving journey
Journey
Slowly
Well, there it is! The final result reminds me a bit of a poem I wrote back in March with a very different structure. I ended up with some rhyme scattered throughout the blitz, and I think that helped me to build a bit of a rhythm in this style. I might even write a second blitz poem someday in the distant future. 😀
Great job with little mouse feet scampering throughout 💕
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Thank you, Paula! I liked the way the little feet could create a tempo for this prompt.
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Beautiful poem
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Thank you, Sadje!
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You’re welcome Sarah
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TBH, I also struggle with these because I can’t seem to get them “feel” poetic to me… But I think of them as writing exercises 🙂 – and you knocked this one out of the park, Sarah ❤
~David
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Aw, thank you! There were so many great ones this week; I definitely had to read a bunch of the others to get a feel for how to do this well!
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Sarah,
The lovely Aishwarya is our host for W3 this week:
Enjoy!
❤
David
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Thanks! I will check it out!
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*hug*
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