
feet sink
into cool sand
leaving whispered stories
washed away with wave’s lullaby
only
slipping onto some other sands
wading in memories
brushing ashore
again
For this week’s #TankaTuesday Poetry Challenge, we were given the task to write a Butterfly Cinquain. I fell in love with this form when I first tried it a couple weeks ago, so I was excited to experiment with this syllabic count a bit more. Spending time at the beach last week, I found myself thinking of the ways we communicate, and the ways our memories form. I believe there are similarities in both of these processes to the flowing of waves over sand and the erasure, erosion, and accretion created by this powerful force of nature. The ocean is something we can’t help but respect, and for good reason. It also lends itself in lovely ways to the written word!
Absolutely fantastic. I can feel this. Hear it. Live it. Love it! 💕🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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This is such a soothing poem for me, Sarah! Well done! 🙂
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Thank you! This form in general feels very calming to me; it seems to lend itself well to nature writing, too. 🙂
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Sarah, this is a lovely discussion of the similarities in communication and memories. Both do seem to ebb and flow like the waves. You captured that so well in your butterfly cinquain. ❤
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Thank you, Colleen!
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Lovely Sarah there is something hypnotic about the ebb and flow of the tide and memories and the feel of sand between your toes that remind of children’s holidays.
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Thank you! I agree that the ocean creates that sense of nostalgia. I hope that pull comes across here 🙂
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So lovely, Sarah. I felt the sand, the dreams…beautiful. 💗
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Thank you!
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This is probably a minor thing, but I really like how there’s “sand” in both halves of your poem, Sarah – the repetition works beautifully!
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Thanks! Sometimes I’m wary of repetition, but I also like playing with the sounds. 🙂
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