
under winter's coat hide grasses undeserving of their wilt and fade, hibernating with the bears and snakes, braking time from locomotive summer days. sunset's ribbon grinds across an unrepentant sky to whispers of cloud glaze: would a half-hearted sun care to halt?
The Wea’ve Written Weekly prompt this week was from Angela Wilson, who asks us to do the following:
- Select a haiku written by someone other yourself;
- Construct a “Golden Shovel” poem from that haiku.
My golden shovel poem was inspired by this haiku by Yamaguchi Seishi:
Grasses wilt: the braking locomotive grinds to a halt.
I had a lot of fun with this one! I don’t believe I’ve written a golden shovel before (mostly because when I’ve come across them in the past, I didn’t quite understand the rules), but I find them quite lovely. I took the sunset photo this evening, and it needed a poem to pair with it.
You definitely “understood the assignment”!! This is lovely and just flows so smoothly!
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Thanks! I think I finally got the hang of the golden shovel!
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my reaction also! this is beyond smooth, Sarah!
❤
David
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Thanks, David! 🙂
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so beautifully done and I love how you captured winter in your poem🤍
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Thank you!
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Pleasure…
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Excellent golden shovel. I really like how you personified the sun like that. Half hearted indeed!
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Thank you! Haha, yes, the attitude of that winter sun up north! 🙂
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Beautifully written
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Thank you!
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You’re right
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Welcome *
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Both photo and poem are evocative. I like how you speak of what’s underneath.
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Thank you!
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This has a wonderful circular motion. (K)
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Thank you!
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Yes you did it expertly and I love the content of your poem in particular I found this beautiful and moving ‘sunset’s ribbon grinds across an unrepentant sky’ ❤
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Thank you!
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I don’t understand the technicalities of the poetry but I loved what you’ve written. Your photograph is also amazing. I really loved it
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Thanks! I love taking photos, though I’m just an amateur. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem. There are so many different forms and details; I’m learning more each week from more experienced poets on here. 🙂
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I agree the WP community are great
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Beautiful work, Sarah! Your strong intent to look and explore unravel the core of the nature.
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Thank you! 🙂
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A beautiful scene you have painted here and an absolutely seamless inclusion of the haiku you chose! 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Sarah –
This week’s W3 prompt, hosted by the amazing Tanmay Philip is now live:
Enjoy ❤
~David
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Thanks! I will check it out. 🙂
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🤗
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You paired this— photo and words— beautifully. Love it. 👏
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Thank you, Selma! I enjoy adding my own photos to my posts. ☺️
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