Weighted Paths

Posted bywordsandcoffee1Posted inPoetryTags:, , , , 
Yesterdays coat my boots
their pathways overflowing
their messages grayed out now
under futures still unknowing
we've taken what's best

~and we're weightless as our footsteps~

pressing forward into darkness
indecision spikes like pebbles
underfoot, but we'll float home
with stars in our eyes 
and daydreams in our pockets

This week’s Wea’ve Written Weekly prompt is courtesy of Tanmay Philip:

  1. Write a “Puente” poem;
  2. The middle stanza should contain the title of a song

I should also point out that I misread the second part of the prompt and used a line from a song rather than a title of a song– oops! I considered finding a different middle stanza, but I kinda like how it sounds. Sorry, friends.

Here’s a bit about puente poems (taken from the W3 post), a form which was totally new to me:

The form has three stanzas with the first and third having an equal number of lines and the middle stanza having only one line which acts as a bridge (puente) between the first and third stanza. The first and third stanzas convey a related but different element or feeling, as though they were two adjacent territories. The number of lines in the first and third stanza is the writer’s choice as is the choice of whether to write it in free verse or rhyme.

The center line is delineated by a tilde (~) and has ‘double duty’. It functions as the ending for the last line of the first stanza AND as the beginning for the first line of the third stanza. It shares ownership with these two lines and consequently bridges the first and third stanzas.

And, of course, the song lyric line is from my favorite band, Young the Giant:

20 thoughts on “Weighted Paths”

  2. Don’t worry about the rules. The bridge line works so well here, that it is well worth it to break them. ‘Stars in our eyes, and daydreams in our pockets,’ — just dreamy. I must say that I really love the figurative language in your poetry.

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