Edge of Momentum

Behold the faded edges of day:
the spinning light that lasts
when shimmers shade to gray.

Fireworks burst today:
afterimage of the past,
behold the faded edges of day

pressed into eyes to stay
like my footprints into grass
when shimmers shade to gray.

At the rounding of spring's rays,
we'll capture sunsets in the glass,
behold the faded edges of day.

Under twinkling lights that play,
we'll recover our lost tracks
when shimmers shade to gray.

Maybe there's nothing more to say,
pouring language in the cracks.
Behold the faded edges of day
when shimmers shade to gray.
Walking in a winter wonderland with the kids.

I’m sure that “Do Not Go Gentle into That Good Night” by Dylan Thomas was what first drew me to the Villanelle, and it’s still one of my favorite poetic forms. I think what I like best about it is that there is a repetition, but it’s not overbearing; it’s the sort of repetition that feels like real life: we repeat, but we also grow and adapt with each new round. Each line builds on the previous line and adapts a slightly new meaning. We (hopefully) adapt from our history to create a better future. It’s lovely, sort of like this song by Young the Giant (the greatest band of all time, in my humble opinion):

I still need to write about how awesome this band is live as my husband took me to see them in October.

Doubtless, I still have a lot to learn about poetry (and life), but I think a villanelle speaks the repetition of life well. As you can tell if you’re a fan of this blog, I also love haiku and tanka and free verse– and sonnets, when I take the time to get the rhyme and rhythm correct. Often, I’ll experiment with forms I’m not as familiar with, and sometimes they turn out smoothly– like this butterfly cinquain I wrote last spring. Limericks are fun, too, but mine always sound far too cheesy to publish. I’m always learning something new from the other amazing writers and poets on WordPress! What’s your favorite poetic form?

14 thoughts on “Edge of Momentum

  1. Shadorma is my go-to form, but I’m very fond of pantoums, although I mostly do them unrhymed. I’ve also been doing Badger’s hexastitch a lot. And cadralor. I like repetition as well. Have you tried the cascade? (K)

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  2. The only term I know here is the limerick. I am so stunted when it comes to poetry. I guess I should explore it a bit more if I want to grow in my craft. Have always admired poets. Keep on keeping on in your poetry journey! So inspiring to read your thoughts on the various facets of poetry, and the best part is I get to learn too.

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    1. Thanks! I’ve been slowly learning about poetry over the years, from a creative writing class in college to teaching a poetry unit in one of my courses to interacting with some really impressive poets here in WordPress. I’m glad there’s so much out there for those of us who are lifelong learners! ☺️


  3. So far my favorite poem is the quatrain. I write 5 to 10 of those a night 3 or 4 nights a week at Google Blogger. I do it there so noone feels obligated to read them all.

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